How to document a change to an earlier proposal

I wrote an e-mail proposal to send to a client but after asking a co-worker’s opinion I decided to reformulate it.

Now I have to describe what has been done but I’m not sure if the expression below is correct or if there is a more idiomatic way to say it.

Revision of the email proposal.

Is this correct, and if not, what would be a better way to express this?


If the description is used as a title or tag in a work-tracking system, you can drop article “the”. Where brevity and directness are important, one might change phrases of form “revision of X” to “X revision”, and phrases of form “proposal about Y” to “Y proposal”.
Thus, consider tags like “Proposal revision”, “Jones proposal revision”, etc.

Unless the proposal is about email, rather than merely transmitted by email, modifying proposal with email is misleading (but emailed would work). For example, “Emailed Jones proposal revision”.

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