I need help to verify if this sentence is correct. The original sentence was:
Please provide contact details below of a person within the organization who is legally permitted to verify your employment.
But then I was asked to add “or department” and now the sentence is:
Please provide contact details below of a person or department within the organization who is legally permitted to verify your employment.
I’m thinking that the use of “who” is not appropriate here. It doesn’t sound right.
Answer
You can drop the pronoun altogether:
Please provide contact details below of a person or department within the organization legally permitted to verify your employment.
Or you can rephrase the sentence slightly:
Please provide contact details below of a person or department within the organization with the legal permission to verify your employment.
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Source : Link , Question Author : M.K. , Answer Author : Jason Bassford