Way to join two sentences

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  1. Even though, the line segments are rectified by the orientation,
    awkward short edges are still appeared.

  2. Therefore, a simplification step is important.

What is the rule to join these two sentences as I want to reduce my word count?

Here is my effort

Even though, the line segments are rectified by the orientation,
awkward short edges are still appeared in which a simplification step
is important.

Can I use a “clause” for this case?

Answer

@StoneyB’s suggestion is a good, concise solution.

“Orientation rectifies the line segments, but awkward short edges call
for a simplification step.”

It does a number of things:

  1. Changes passive voice to active. Active voice tends to be shorter, as it replaces ‘are rectified by’ with ‘rectify’.
  2. ‘but awkward short edges’ replaced ‘awkward short edges still appeared’. The appearance of edges is implied by the sentence, and does not necessarily have to be stated. If you felt the need for some additional clarification, you could write it as “but the appearance of awkward short edges calls for …”
  3. Three cumbersome clauses replaced with two.

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Source : Link , Question Author : niro , Answer Author : fred2

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