I have to change a description for something in our app, and I was given this sentence:
Create, edit and delete camera assignments and camera and DVR settings.
Now the lack of an Oxford comma is obviously going to need to be updated, but I’m having some trouble with the subject of the sentence.
camera assignmentsis one subject, but
camera and DVR settingsseems to be another, compounded from
So far my fix for it would be:
Create, edit, and delete camera assignments, camera settings, and DVR settings.
Is this sentence grammatically correct? It still seems like a repetitive mouthful. Could something be done with
camera settings(both being a property of a
camera) to compound this more neatly?
What you’ve written is correct. “Camera assignments, camera settings and DVR settings” are objects of “Create, edit and delete.”
You need the qualification on settings because you have both camera settings and DVR settings.